Make your book its best

You are writing—or have written—a book. Congratulations! Let’s talk about your logical next step.

Why should we talk?

You have checked in with family and friends about your manuscript. Good. Now take feedback to the next level: a professional who can stand in for your eventual readers. Like those readers, I don’t know you. I care about how your book does in the world because this work is my passion.

Publishers offer less and less editing now

Most books receive only light editing from publishers, if any. If you self-publish, all of the responsibility falls on you for drawing in your reader.

I help you draw them in.

Let’s talk.


What Makes Editing Developmental?

Developmental editing structures your book so that readers who’ve read for five or 45 minutes will want to come back for more. There may be some copy editing for clarity. But my primary job is building a visual and aural bridge between you and your reader.

Developmental editing:

  • helps your book emerge with a clear, engaging through line.
  • recommends headlines to help pace the reader’s experience.
  • may recommend that a story or a whole chapter move from one location to another for more punch.

I will tell you when you’re including details that we don’t need. Or when your anecdote is falling on its little face. I will help you make your book sing.


How I Help You Find Your Voice

Developmental editing that comes from a client-centered, positive perspective enriches the work of writers. Working with individual authors, small companies, Fortune 500 firms, not-for-profit organizations and government agencies, I have honed my craft over decades. I listen carefully to you as you speak, finding the rhythms, peaks and troughs of your natural voice, then coaching you to use a natural style in your writing.

Clients include:  

  • Individual and two-author book writers
  • Gilead Sciences
  • National AIDS Foundation
  • Pfizer Inc.
  • International Federation of Red Cross and Red Crescent Societies
  • Bristol-Myers Squibb
  • Hollywood Supports
  • City of Glendale, California
  • U.S. Department of Labor

Let’s talk. We’ll explore whether my style of coaching writers might help you find your authentic author’s voice.

How do you know that I know what I’m doing? Click here to Learn More



with Dick Axelrod

with Dick Axelrod

Why Hire Me?

Because actual publication is still one more station down the track.

Make sure your book connects with your readers when it gets there.

You’ll structure your book so that you connect with readers, whether they start at your introduction or somewhere in the middle. Your chapters will connect readers with your voice, whether they invest an hour or five minutes each time they read.

What is the one most important point you want to make?

When you have this one point, I’ll help you thread it through your book so that it’s in readers’ ears from the moment they read their first chapter.

A great example is Leaders Open Doors, by Bill Treasurer (iUniverse, 2013). Bill knew from day one that his key message was this: leaders open doors for people. They create possibilities. They don’t just open doors to walk through them alone. Bill made that point in every chapter, resoundingly.  With that message firmly in mind, Bill was off to a running start when we began working on his book.

Have you ever left a movie or a musical play with the theme sounding in your ears? That’s what we’ll do with your key message. Congratulations! You’re going to be an earworm!

A Guide to Developmental Editing for Your Book Click here to read


with Martha Summerville & Charlotte Roberts

Book Projects and Authors

Editions 1-5 (1999-2014) of the best-selling business book on employee retention, by Beverly Kaye and Sharon Jordan-Evans.

Beverly Kaye’s and Sharon Jordan-Evans’ 2003 companion book to Love ‘Em or Lose ‘Em for employees.

Second edition by Richard Axelrod, 2010. Named one of five best business books of 2010 by 800.CEO.READ

Bill Treasurer,, 2013.

Richard and Emily Axelrod, Berrett-Koehler, 2014.

Beverly Kaye and Sharon Jordan-Evans, Berrett-Koehler, 2015.

Jennifer Kahnweiler, Berrett-Koehler, 2015.

Ron Wallace, former delivery driver and President of UPS International, Berrett-Koehler, 2016.

JV Venable, former commander, Air Force Thunderbird Team (The Blue Angels), Berrett-Koehler, 2016.

Bill Treasurer, Berrett-Koehler, 2017.

Charlotte M. Roberts and Martha W. Summerville, Standing in the River Press LLC, 2016.

Fred Jewell
We Can’t Do It Alone: Building Influence with Simple Strategies
December 13, 2017

Clear Magic LLC

Nancy Breuer

Principal, Clear Magic LLC

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